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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy.The benefits of nuclear technologies far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is an irrefutable fact that nuclear
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 has had many advantages compared to its disadvantages.
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 have done,
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benefits
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of
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 being one of the few alternatives for a better ecosystem.  One prominent drawback of
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nuclear
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, since the discovery of atomic radiation, is the creation of atomic bombs. The primary purpose of these
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 is to be used
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 battlefields, and
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 why the US has pursued developing them. And
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 these were tested in many countries,
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 as Japan. Japan needed to suffer the consequences of
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battle-minded nation.
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,
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 can be solved easily if countries reach a consensus on holding onto these nuclear weapons. Nowadays, nuclear
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 has reached its purity, where its present use is more beneficial than any drawbacks. Nuclear
power
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 is now a well-known energy generator. It uses nuclear radiation to generate electricity, which is not only eco-friendly but
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 a cheaper alternative.It can foster a cleaner environment, unlike other
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 sources,
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 as oil
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 promotes climate change when releasing harmful gases.
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, Russia has publicly reported that the usage of nuclear radiation as a
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 source has reduced
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 air pollution by 20%.
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 drawbacks In conclusion, using nuclear
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 as a solution for the climate change phenomenon makes
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 more beneficial
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 its negativity of destroying some nations.

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task
State a clear view at the start and keep it. Then add real facts or details to back your view. Try to discuss both sides but end with your own line.
coherence
Put ideas in a clear order. Use simple linking words like First, Also, Then, Finally to move ideas from one part to another.
strength
The essay has a clear aim to argue for the good use of nuclear energy.
content
The topic is connected to real issues like energy and pollution.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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