The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive.
The diagrams illustrate the causes and effects of poor agricultural
land
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during the 1990s, comparing North
America
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, Europe, and
Oceania
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.
Overall
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, the primary cause of worldwide
land
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degradation
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is overgrazing, which accounts for 35% of the issue.
Oceania
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is the most affected, contributing 11.3%,
while
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North
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has the least impact, contributing only 1.5%.
In addition
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to overgrazing, the less common causes of
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degradation
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include over-cultivation and deforestation. Deforestation accounts for 30%,
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over-cultivation is responsible for 28%. Europe experiences the highest level of
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degradation
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at 23%, followed by
Oceania
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at 13%, and North
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at 5%. The primary contributor to European
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degradation
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is over-cultivation, which accounts for 3.3%,
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tree cutting contributes only 0.2%.
In contrast
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,
Oceania
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sees a significant impact from deforestation, contributing 9.8%,
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it only uses 5.5% of its farmland for grazing livestock, which is considered low. North
America
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does not cultivate its
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extensively
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significantly overgrazes it compared to the other regions, contributing 11.3% to total
land
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degradation
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, america, oceania, degradation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • land
  • soil
  • farm
  • crop
  • rain
  • water
  • sun
  • wind
  • drought
  • heat
  • growth
  • yield
  • productivity
  • erosion
  • soil erosion
  • nutrient
  • nutrients
  • fertilizer
  • manure
  • overuse
  • irrigation
  • salt
  • salt in soil
  • pest
  • pests
  • weed
  • weeds
  • pollution
  • climate
  • change
  • problem
  • cause
  • result
  • effect
  • improve
  • protect
  • manage
  • solution
  • policy
  • plan
  • note
  • link
  • lead to
  • due to
  • as a result
  • depth
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