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The table provides information about how people in five counties spending money on various items during 2002

The table provides information about how people in five counties spending money on various items during 2002
The table provides information about how people in five counties
spending
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spent
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 money on various items during 2002 It is crystal clear that
,
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apply
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 Turkey has the highest proportion of their income on food, drinks and tobacco
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while
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, while
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Sweden
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 indicated the lowest category in food and clothing,
Spain
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and Spain
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 is the least preferred in leisure. Among the 5
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countries
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county
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county,
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 Turkey has the highest spending on food
about
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, about
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 32.14%, Ireland follows it closely
28.91
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, 28.91
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%,
while
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Sweden
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 takes the lowest place with 15.77%. In the clothing
category
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category,
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 Italy leads with 9.00%. Other countries,
such
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 as Ireland
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, taking
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taking
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take
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 the fourth place on
list
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the list
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about
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, about
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 6.43% except for
Sweden
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, taking
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taking
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which takes
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 the lowest place again
with
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, with
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 5.40%.When it comes to leisure
Turkey
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, Turkey
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 again stands out with the highest percentage of 4.35% followed by
Sweden
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 (3.22%) and Italy (3.20%)

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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