The bar graph present basic knowledge about the overweight adults in four country Japan, Finland, Australia, and the USA — across three years: 1980, 1990, and 2000

The bar graph present basic knowledge about the overweight adults in four country Japan, Finland, Australia, and the USA — across three years: 1980, 1990, and 2000
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The bar graph
present
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presents
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basic knowledge about the overweight adults in four
country
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countries
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Japan
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: Japan
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, Finland, Australia, and the USA — across three years: 1980, 1990, and 2000. Looking
from
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at
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an
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the
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overall
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structure, it is readily apparent that the proportion of overweight adults increased in all four countries over the time period. The most notable rises were seen in Australia and the USA
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while
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, while
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the
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apply
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Japan had the lowest percentage. USA showed
significant
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a significant
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increase
-
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,
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starting with 15% of
population
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the population
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in 1980 and
reached
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reaching
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peak
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a peak
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point in
the
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apply
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2000 with
the
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apply
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about 30% population. It experienced the most dramatic increase among the four nations. Australia
also
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show
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a noteable
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noteable
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notable
rise from around 8% in 1980 to approximately 21% in 2000. Finland, in the beginning at around 7%,
increasing
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increased
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to about 9% in 1990, and
has its peaking
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peaked
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11% in 2000. Japan had the lowest figures, with only about 1-3% over the years, indicating a relatively stable and low rate of overweight adults.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "present" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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