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Nowadays, more and more people prefer to work remotely from home rather than going to a traditional office. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

Recently, a growing proportion of individuals choose to work remotely from their accommodation rather than going to a typical office.
While
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this
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 situation offers many benefits, it
also
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 presents certain drawbacks.
This
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 essay will explore both the upside and downside effects of working remotely. One major advantage of working remotely is saving time effectively.
People
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 can spend their time
for
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on
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 their family or their social life
instead
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 of going to
office
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the office
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.
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, they can go to the cinema, theatre or even gym where they want.
This
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affects greatly
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greatly affects
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to
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their family relationships and helps to manage their children’s
life
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lives
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which
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, which
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 is the most important thing in a family
being
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apply
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.
In addition
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,
people
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 who work remotely can save their money than
the
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others. They don’t spend anything going to work that
it
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which
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 includes bus tickets or
disparate
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a different
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 type of transport. With
this
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, they help to reduce
amount
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the amount
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 of carbon
emission
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emissions
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 without
realizing
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realising
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 it. Despite its benefits, working remotely
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 brings several disadvantages. One key issue is the decline in
face to face
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face-to-face
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 interaction
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, which
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 can lead to social isolation and decreasing personal skills.
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, working remotely can destroy the daily routine that helps
people
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 to
keep
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stay
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 fit as they should be.
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,
people
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 who go
the
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to the
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 office
,
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apply
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they
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apply
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need to wake up in the morning,
washing
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wash their
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 hands, and have
a
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breakfast.
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This type
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These types
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 of
people
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 have a plan
on
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for
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 their daily routine and can manage it clearly. In the absence of
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, some
people
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 don’t care
their
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about their
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 daily health. After
wake
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waking
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 up, they take
computer
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the computer
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 and
checking
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check
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 emails. In conclusion, working remotely has
their
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its
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 own advantages
while
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 affects negatively to our lives from communication skills to health conditions. A balanced approach can shape our lives without any unwanted problems.

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grammar
Fix wrong word forms and hard phrasing. For example, write: 'This greatly affects their family relationships' and 'They save more money than others.'
content
Add more clear ideas and proof for each point. Use small facts or numbers or simple steps.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea, and begin with a clear line that shows that idea. Use linking words like first, also, but, because to join ideas.
structure
Introduction and conclusion are present.
content
Some specific examples are given, like saving time and less travel.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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