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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

In recent years, many people prefer to use public
transport
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 as
a
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the
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 most popular way of transportation,
while
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 others believe that personal cars are
best
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the best
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 and comfortable way of moving. I completely agree with the group
who
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that
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 loves public
transport
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. I
this
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 essay
I
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, I
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will provide the pros and cons of it. On one hand, in places where you can use
diffrent
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different
 ways of moving, make
this
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 area more attractive for tourists and locals.
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example
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 access
for
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to
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 trains and buses
save
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saves
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 a lot of
time
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 to get to work from suburban areas.
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 modern buses produce zero air
pollution
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pollution,
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 as most of them are electric. Flexibility of usage
different
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of different
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 types of
transport
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, save
time
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 and make urban
area
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areas
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 more eco-friendly.
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,
this
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 way of transportation can make one unhappy
und
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and
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 useless.
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, in the morning or evening
trains
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, trains
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 and buses would be overcrowded. You will need to wait for a long
time
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your
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for your
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 vehicle. And it will be full of passengers.
Moreover
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 cost of tickets
uprise
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rises
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 each year. So now it is not
so
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as
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 chip as before. In conclusion, I strongly believe that public
transport
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 is better than
own
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car
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a car
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. Saving
time
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, zero waste and usability are the best sides of it.
While
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 private cars
still
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are still
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 popular, public
transport
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 is more suitable for most people around the world. I hope in the future it will be only one type of
transport
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.
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, public
transport
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 is useful, but its value depends on the place and how well it is run; a mix of both options is common.

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task management
Plan your essay first. Write one clear idea for each paragraph. Start with a small intro that states your view. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Use more linking words to join ideas. Use words like also, but, however, for example, and then.
content
Be clear with your examples. Give one clear point and give a simple example for it.
accuracy
Check spelling and word choice. Some words are misspelled or not in common use.
content
You show a clear view that public transport can be good.
content
You give some points for and against, not just one side.
structure
There is a conclusion that repeats your view.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • car
  • pros and cons
  • save money
  • save time
  • traffic
  • parking
  • pollution
  • delays
  • crowded
  • timetable
  • schedule
  • reliable
  • flexible
  • safety
  • comfort
  • convenient
  • green air
  • environment
  • city life
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