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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where did their training. Others believe they should be freen to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Some
belive
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 that
high
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highly
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qulified
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qualified
 people
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such
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, such
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 as doctors and
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engineers
enginnrs
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enginnrs,
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 should stay in a country
,
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apply
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 where they got
education
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their education
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.
While
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 others think they have a right to choose
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place
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apply
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where to work. Discussions about it
lasts
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last
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 for many years.
This
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 essay will give both sides of
view
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the view
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 and give my opinion.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand, professionals should stay in a
place
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 where they
got stydy
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studied
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. In
this
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way
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way,
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 they
probably may
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may probably
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 increase their skills in
easy
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an easy
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 and better way.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 their
knowledges
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knowledge
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 may be more
usefull
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useful
 and
sutable
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suitable
 for a
place
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 where they
snend
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spend
 more
of
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apply
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time. Native language and staying at home can make their life more comfortable. Real
talants
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talents
 should stay
at
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in
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home
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their home
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 country and help their neighbours.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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,
In
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in
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 some places in the
world
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world,
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 the main problem is poor
life
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living conditions
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 and low salaries. In
this
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 case, for
real
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really
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 smart and educated persons is issues in finding
job
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a job
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. Every
place
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 needs masters of their occupation, but low wages destroy
ability
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the ability
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 for them to stay in.
Body paragraph 3
Due to
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this
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 fact, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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professionals are looking for a better
place
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 to work and live. Because it is a hard way to become
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a uniqe
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uniqe
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unique
 individual in your sphere, education and
incresing
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increasing
 skills need
a
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apply
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money and
a
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apply
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time.
Conclusion
To sum up
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,
In
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in
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 each case people should make their decision
them-selfes
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themselves
. Freedom is
main
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the main
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 reason in their
choise
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choice
. Nobody should
not
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stop them. I think
,
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apply
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high
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highly
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 educated workers should be
every where
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everywhere
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, but options for them should be
every where
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everywhere
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.

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structure
Plan with a clear start, two body parts, and a short finish. Put the main idea in the first sentence of each paragraph.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check spellings and fix easy mistakes.
content
Keep ideas on one or two clear points. Do not add long, unsure phrases.
lexical
Give a simple example to show your point.
content
The writer tries to show both sides of the issue.
content
An opinion is given at the end.
coherence
There is some use of linking words to join ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • country
  • training
  • doctor
  • engineer
  • work
  • move
  • abroad
  • free
  • benefit
  • harm
  • local
  • public
  • need
  • shortage
  • pay
  • learn
  • skill
  • policy
  • rule
  • return
  • time
  • agreement
  • incentive
  • balance
  • plan
  • issue
  • view
  • opinion
  • discuss
  • visa
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