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Band 4.5

Many individuals believe that taking regular health check-ups is unnecessary if they feel healthy. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint? Explain your answer.

Some people believe that taking frequent
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 activities is
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essential
 if they feel all right. I disagree with
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 idea because everyone should take care of their
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 to stay
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healthy
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. One main reason why
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 disagree is that regular
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check-ups
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 are unnecessary. Well-being is one of the most significant keys to life. Without it, you can not feel alive and will always
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strength issues. To avoid similar problems, everyone should pay attention to their
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 and should take regular
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 checks even if they feel well.
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,
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 statistics, nowadays there are over a million kinds of bacteria. Who will guarantee that you will not get infected? It is possible that you can get sick if you do not take regular
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that
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related to
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your well-being
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. Most people do not like paying attention because of a lack of time management , which can lead to serious
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 issues.
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, regular
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check-ups
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 are an essential key to
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avoiding
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 any
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 predicaments. Another reason that
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 do not support the view that constant
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unnecessary
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are unnecessary
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 is that "sickness comes without warning." It is possible that you can get an illness every time. It depends on your precautions. Everyone is responsible for their
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.
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, regular checks are always useful if you want to stay mentally and physically fit and balanced.
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, you can avoid
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 issues by just taking regular
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. In conclusion, I disagree that taking frequent checks is unnecessary if you feel healthy. You should start taking care of your
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 without thinking about
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. It is important to remember that it is useful to control your
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 in your own hands.

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task response
Be clear in your view at the start and end. State if you agree or disagree in one simple line, and repeat it in the conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use one main idea per paragraph and give one clear example for each idea.
coherence and cohesion
Link sentences with easy words like and, but, so. Use simple order so your essay flows well.
task response
You state your view clearly and stay on topic.
coherence and cohesion
The essay follows a simple plan with an intro, two body ideas, and a conclusion.
content
There are some good ideas about health checks in a steady line.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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