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Band 4.5

Some people believe that planing for the future is a waste of time because they think that focusing on the present is more important. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Few individuals are against
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future
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 planning, arguing
it
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that it
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as
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is
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 a waste of
time
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 and effort. They
also
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 believe that focusing on
present
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the present
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 moment takes priority. From my
perspective
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perspective,
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while
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 living the moment with complete attention works well for
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a few
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 activities, I believe most of
important
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the important
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 decisions in life need to be well planned.
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, I completely disagree
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 primary statement and aim to explain the reasons through
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Firstly
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, the most important reason why we have to plan before taking action is
because
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that
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good planning helps one to be well informed and efficiently prepare for
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future
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 events
which
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, which
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 can be so unpredictable.
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, a student who will be facing an annual exam in
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months
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six-month
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 period, with the help of an effective
plan
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plan,
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 can create attainable goals and start preparation early
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, and
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thus
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thus,
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 as
evidently
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has been
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proven
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proven,
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 can achieve better grades and boost confidence.
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, a person with
a
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good planning would have the ability to take the few most effective actions without spending much energy and
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in
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creating the most efficient outcome.
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, planning in advance
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 impact on the
future
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,
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this
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 might be seen as a
wastage
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waste
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 of
time
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initially
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, in the long
run
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run,
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this
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 can be a significant process to alleviate
future
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disaster
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disasters
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 or
problem
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problems
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 by being capable of taking productive measures.
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, after one year
research
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of research
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 into the rising ocean temperatures, marine scientists have discovered global warming as a detrimental cause for
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 phenomenon and have urged
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the government
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 to take imperative measures immediately to deescalate the dire consequences.
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adequate planning can
help
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helping
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 us eradicate a
future
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 anticipated problem. In conclusion,
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 efficient planning comes with the cost of effort and
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, when compared to the tremendous benefits it
offers
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offers,
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 I strongly agree
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 need for planning
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, which
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 can help in productively
prepare
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preparing
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 and
act
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acting
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 in the most efficient manner to achieve a particular goal or in preventing an adverse problem.

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task response
Be clear at the start. State your view and the main 3 reasons. Then keep to that plan.
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Add more direct and clear examples for each reason. Use real facts or true cases.
coherence
Make short, clear sentences. Break long lines into two. This helps flow.
coherence
Watch grammar: its vs it's, and word use like deescalate. Poor form hurts meaning.
language
Use easy words. Do not use many hard words. The goal is to be easy to read.
content
Clear view that planning helps future results.
structure
Essay has a simple plan and basic parts.
content
Examples are used to show ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • unexpected expenses
  • career advancement
  • long-term goals
  • structured approach
  • personal development
  • educational goals
  • fulfilling life
  • spontaneous experiences
  • emotional fulfillment
  • embrace opportunities
  • mental health
  • reduce stress and anxiety
  • mindfulness
  • balanced approach
  • flexibility and adaptation
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