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Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Household Internet Access 60% 50% 40% 30% 20% 10% 0% 1999 2000 2001 2002 2003 2004

The chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the data of European
country
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countries
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 in terms of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
internet
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access
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 of urban and rural
household
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households
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 from 1999 to 2004.
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, the percentage of both urban and rural households that had
internet
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access
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 increased gradually from 1999 to 2004.
People
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 used
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in urban areas
has least
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had the lowest
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 ratio in 1999, which steadily grew to
maximum
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a maximum
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 in 2004,
while
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 in rural areas it
was
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substantially increased during the same years. In 1999, the percentage in urban households was at a low level
with
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of
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 15, which notably
gets
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doubled in 2000 to 30.
Subsequently
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, the
people
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 who had
access
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 to
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Internet
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the Internet
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 increased to 40 in 2001. In the suburban area, the fraction boosted to 50 in 2002, moderately climbed to 52% in
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year
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apply
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2003. By the end of 2005,
the
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Internet
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access
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escalated
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had escalated
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 to 55%. In rural areas, only 2% of the
people
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 had
access
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 to
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Internet
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the Internet
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 in 1999, which
minimally
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apply
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grew to 5% after one
year
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. In 2001, the proportion became 10% which was double
than
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that
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the
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of the
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last
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previous
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year
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. The
Internet
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access
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 to rural
people
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 was at 15% in 2002, which jumped to 25% after a
year
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. In
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year
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the year
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 2004, it
raised
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rose
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 to
higher
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a higher
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 percentile of 35
which
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, which
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 was
greatest
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the greatest
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 of all the earlier years.

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task response
Fix the task by giving a clear view of the data. Use accurate numbers and the years from the chart. Do not change figures.
coherence
Make the essay easy to follow. Describe the overall rise, then compare urban and rural. Use simple linking words to show order.
overview
There is an overall trend that both urban and rural access rises.
comparison
The writer tries to compare urban and rural data.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • rise
  • increase
  • grow
  • steady
  • gradual
  • start
  • end
  • year
  • year by year
  • period
  • data
  • show
  • compared with
  • higher
  • lower
  • overall
  • percentage
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