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Some people believe that artificial intelligence (AI) will soon replace accountants in financial sector. What is your opinion?

In
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 modern era, the dramatic development of artificial intelligence has influenced
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numerous
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As a result
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, some individuals argue that financial workers will soon be
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 by
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 my point of view, that perspective is not totally true.
This
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 essay aims to supply
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analysis
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 of
this
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 major viewpoint. On the one hand, it is essential to
recognize
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 the significant advantages that
AI
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 offers for
financial
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 sector. It is noteworthy that
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 the fundamental data quickly
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 accurately, which is time-consuming for
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. To
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,
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humans
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 can program the
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 to do some
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 or do
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task
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 automatically associated with financial
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, using the
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 could be more efficient for the company, which means that the cost of
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 the
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 could be cheaper than paying for an accountant.
On the other hand
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, it is pivotal to consider the integral role of
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, especially in managing how
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, computer
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 are not flexible enough to make the appropriate decision or have
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oversight in every situation.
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,
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 is not capable of updating the information for each person in a company, or it is a bit
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 for
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 to manage the risk without human judgment. In summary, I believe that
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 generate the
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as well as
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 control it.
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,
instead
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 of being a job displacement,
AI
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 had better be a reliable assistance for accountants
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 and for individuals in
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 with the target of productivity.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear view in the intro and tell what you will talk about.
language
Use simple words and short sentences to keep the text clear.
grammar
Fix grammer errors like wrong verb form and word form.
content
Give a clear example for each point to back up your view.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and order.
structure
You use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to show sides.
conclusion
You end with a clear final view.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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