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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.
The pie chart presents the proportion of
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 cars produced worldwide in 2015.
Overall
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, Greater China made up the majority of global
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 car production,
whereas
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 the Middle East and Africa contributed the least.
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 cars from Greater China represented 26% of total output, making it the single largest producer in the world.
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,
this
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 proportion was only marginally higher, by one percentage point, than that of Europe, which stood at 25%. North America ranked third with 19%, followed by Japan/Korea at 16%, showing only a slight gap between the two.
In contrast
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, the three remaining regions each contributed less than 10%. South Asia manufactured about 8% of
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 cars,
while
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 South America accounted for half of that
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amount
, at 4%. The Middle East and Africa had by far the smallest share, at just 2%, highlighting their relatively limited role in the global car manufacturing industry compared with other regions.

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