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Some people think that study of history is little use to us.others believe that studying history helps us to know the present. discuss both the viewpoints and give your own opinion

There is an argument about the necessity of studying
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some
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people
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 think it is of little use in our lives
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 others believe it is
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critical
. In
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essay
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 I will examine both
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 and give my opinion. Studying
history
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 brings some advantages
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, studying
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 will widen
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's eyes'
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 and learning our present conditions in
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a more
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 comprehensive way. As the historical stories could provide
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 with different perspectives to
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 and understand the historical results.
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people
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 can apply the comprehensive thinking to their daily life, to
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 the present issue. which may make us gain a deep insight.
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,
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 may find deals in
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 to cope
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 current situation as
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 always
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 again,
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, nowadays, more and more
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afraid
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are afraid
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 to lose their
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jobs
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,
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 the development of
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artificial intelligence, a lot of robots are
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for replacing so
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 repetitive work.
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 situation is like the first industrial revolution.
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history
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 we learn the best solution is
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to learn
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 new
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 to adapt
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 change of work environment,
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 of complaining and trying to stop the development of industry.
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is still
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 practical. So,
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history
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like
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people’s
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 teacher. The possible reason why some
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 think
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history
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 is useless is
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that they
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 want to spend all their
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studying
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 time on practical
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subjects
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, like math, computer science, biology, etc. There is no doubt that
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 all efforts on
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 kind of
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 can help
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 better
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satisfy the
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 skill requirement. But in
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 run, those
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lack understanding
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society, and feel confused
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 future and
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 inspiration.

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task response
Give your view clearly at the end and keep the idea simple.
coherence
Make a small plan. In each paragraph say one main idea and then give a short example.
coherence
Use clear word links like and, but, so to show how ideas are connected.
content
The writer tries to show both sides.
structure
The use of first and second order words helps to show steps.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical knowledge
  • analyzing historical events
  • critical thinking
  • evidence-based reasoning
  • contemporary issues
  • practical benefit
  • advancements
  • interpretations
  • biased
  • misunderstandings
  • pragmatic value
  • rapidly changing world
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