The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction from 2030 adn 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction from 2030 adn 2040.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction from 2030 adn 2040.
The chart illustrates the percentage of the population in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and
Indonesia
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living in urban areas on the period of 1970 to 2020, extending its predictions till 2040.
Overall
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, the number of people in cities in each country is
expeted
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expected
only to increase, mostly
for
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by
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2 times or more. At the start of the observed period in the
1970
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1970s
, the leading nation in urban population was
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, being slightly ahead of Malaysia at around 31%. Not only did
Indonesia
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, with
the
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a
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minor
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small
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number of people in cities
eventually
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, eventually
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ended
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end
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up 2nd, but
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also it
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it also
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surpassed
to
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apply
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other countries. Malaysia,
while
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being the 2nd leading nation at the
beggining
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beginning
,
it
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apply
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is predicted to become by far the leading one by
2040
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2040,
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at approximately 85%, but
also
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. Thailand did not experience any large changes
,
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;
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it saw
a
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apply
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consistent growth, but still is expected to finish fourth at roughly 45%, yielding its position to
Indonesia
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. Regarding structure breaks, every country's urban population rise was steady, but only in the year of 1990 the Philippines started decreasing and gave up its leading position to
Malasia
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Malaysia
, which
on
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, on
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the
contary
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contrary
,
begam
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began
growing more sharply.
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, there were no obvious changes in Thailand's trends
,
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;
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it
was rising
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rose
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from 1970 to 1990,
then
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it
was staying
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stayed
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at the same spot for around 30 years, following some more growth from 2020 to 2040. The
last
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country,
Indonesia
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, did not experience any massive shifts, but a little bit more expansive growth, starting in the year 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words indonesia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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