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Today, more and more full time university students focus on other activities rather than spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People believe that many undergraduate
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 in a college are more interested in doing non-academic
activities
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 rather than
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academics. I believe that even though
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 the non-academics are important to their soft-
skills
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 development,
students
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 should
also
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 aim for
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 in academics. Many universities offer other
activities
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 that are believed can improve their
student’s
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 performance. They are offered to join and actively participate in
sport
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 teams, debate teams, art-related
organizations
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 and others. Undergraduate
students
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 believe that joining these teams can develop their social
skills
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, problem-solving
skills
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 or teach them how to work in a team.
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, they believe that these experiences can be added to their personal portfolio when they apply
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 jobs and give added
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 that can be beneficial for them in the future.
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, many
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 spend more
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 these non-academic
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 and less
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on studying
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 or
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 that these are more crucial for their future. Despite
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tha
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the
 fact that
students
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 need to improve their
skills
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 outside the classroom, they
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 obligated to perform well
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 their academics. Even though these youngsters are very excellent in their
organization
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, they will not graduate from university if their academic
grade
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grades
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 not satisfactory.
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, the
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 are built to improve their logical thinking
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 it will be useful when they are at work. To
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, even though the non-academic
activities
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 are important to the undergraduate
students
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, it does not mean that they can ignore their academic
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 since both are crucial in shaping their
skills
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task-response
Explain your views with clear reasons. Add a simple example for each point to show what you mean.
coherence
Link ideas with easy words. Use 'First', 'Then', 'But', 'Also', 'However' to show how ideas go together.
grammar
Watch grammar and sentence form. Some phrases are not right; fix them.
lexical-resource
Use a wider range of simple words and phrases, but keep them easy.
structure
Keep paragraphs with one main idea. Each paragraph should have a clear point.
content
Clear stance that both non-academic activities and academic work matter.
organization
Essay has a basic structure with introduction, body, and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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