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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Itay and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Itay and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The provided line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per person for four European countries—the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal—over a 40-year period from 1967 to 2007. The
emissions
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 are measured in metric
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the United Kingdom had the highest per capita CO2
emissions
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 throughout the entire period,
while
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 Portugal's
emissions
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 remained the lowest. The United Kingdom's
emissions
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 experienced a gradual decline from over 10
tonnes
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 in 1967 to around 8.5
tonnes
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 in 2007. Sweden's
emissions
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 fluctuated, peaking at approximately 10.5
tonnes
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 in 1977 before falling to just over 5
tonnes
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 by the end of the period, making it the country with the most significant reduction.
In contrast
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, both Italy and Portugal saw an increase in
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. Italy's figure rose steadily from about 4.5
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 to reach a peak of 7.5
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 in 1997, where it remained until 2007. Portugal's
emissions
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 rose continuously, starting at approximately 1 tonne and reaching just over 5
tonnes
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 by 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • CO2
  • emissions
  • emission
  • carbon
  • carbon dioxide
  • trend
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • grow
  • drop
  • go up
  • go down
  • peak
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • than
  • as
  • with
  • in
  • over the period
  • by 2007
  • during the period
  • around
  • in 1967
  • in 2007
  • compare
  • contrast
  • different
  • similar
  • policy
  • energy
  • industry
  • economy
  • wealth
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