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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction from 2030 adn 2040.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction from 2030 adn 2040.
The given line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of individuals residing in
cities
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 of four different countries,
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the Phillippines
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Phillippines
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Philippines
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, Malaysia,
Thailand
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, and Indonesia, over a period of 70 years from 1970 to 2040.
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The Phillippines
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Phillippines
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Philippines
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 and Malaysia had the highest number of people living in urban settings in 1970. Malaysia saw a gradual increase throughout the years, reaching
to
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80% of
total
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the total
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 population living in
cities
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 by 2040.
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The Phillippines
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Phillippines
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Philippines
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exhibit
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exhibits
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 fluctuations
through
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throughout
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 the entire period. The
percentage
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 rose to alomost 50 % in 1990, before it
falls
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fell
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 to 40% in 2010 and
further
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increases
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increased
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 to more than 50 % by 2040. Both
Thailand
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 and Indonesia demonstrated an upward trend from 1970 to 2040. In Indonesia,
during
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in
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 1970, only a small
percentage
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 of citizens called
cities
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as
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apply
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their homes,
whereas
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 these numbers
predicted
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are predicted
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 to reach
to
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apply
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more than 50 %
in
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by
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 2040.
Thailand
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 follows a similar pattern where more
populations
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population
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 will be migrating to
cities
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. It is predicted that
Thailand
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is
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will be
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 the
coutry
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country
 with
least
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the least
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percentage
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 of people living in
cities
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 by 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, cities, thailand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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