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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

In the globe, there are different societies and nations with disparate traditions, attitudes,
attires
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attire
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 and customs. Some individuals believe that
people
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 character and culture can be
guess
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 solely by their mode of dressing.
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 essay will support
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 notion for two reasons, which I am going to explain in the following paragraphs.
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, tagging people just by their choice of clothes is not fair, but I personally reckon that the way of clothing can be related to a person's character.
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, an educationist
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 in
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high
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 institution will
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cooperate
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apply
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in
suit
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corporate attire
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 for the office,
soas
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 to be addressed
formaly
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formally
and
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this
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 shows his or her personality.
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, in an organisational setting, there is always a
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 code
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this
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 will portray your behaviour.
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, for
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entertainers like musicians,
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, the majority of them prefer to wear T-shirts and jeans.
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, based on the aforementioned matters, your way of clothing can reveal your personality to a great extent.
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, we witness that there are different attires across the world in
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 a way that despite the emergence of a phenomenon called fashion, which have made individuals around the globe to
dress
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 like each other, still some yoruba women in Nigeria like wearing their traditional clothes, which is called iro and buba, and by
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 deed, they differentiate themselves from other cultures in Nigeria, because Nigeria has a diverse cultures
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 as hausa, igbo, and they
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 have their own
dress
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 pattern which denote their ethnicity.
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, their manner of wearing can reveal their traditions. In conclusion, regarding the fact that whether a person's
dress
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 code can show his or her character and culture, I agree that it is possible to identify a
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person's
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 culture and attitudes based on his or her dressing appearance.

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Task Response
Answer the question directly in a simple, clear way in the opening paragraph and keep your view consistent through the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea with a clear link to the next paragraph. Use simple connecting words to guide the reader.
Content
Use more exact and relevant examples and show how they prove your point about dress and culture, with short explanations.
Language
Use short, simple sentences and check grammar and word choice to avoid mistakes that slow readers.
Strength
The essay shows a clear position on whether clothing reveals culture and character.
Strength
There is an attempt to use real examples from different groups within a country.
Strength
There is a basic structure of introduction, body, and conclusion.
Strength
The idea of linking dress to behavior and tradition is present, showing some thinking about topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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