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Some people think that nespapers are the best way to learn about current events. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other media. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many humans believe that newspapers are the prime method to know about new
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,
however
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, think that they are able to explore news in a better way by
differnt
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different
 media,
such
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 as
mobile
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phone
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This
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essay
 will disclose both
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 of view.
To begin
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people
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 who
use
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 newspapers to learn about current
events
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 are prone to be old
people
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 because they are not capable
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use
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phones
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 and old
people
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 born in
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 were there
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phones
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, but there was only
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a newspaper
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.
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, they are more comfortable using newspapers
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 the
phone
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 is very complex for old
people
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, one of the
benifits
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benefits
 of using
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 is
the
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that
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person
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people
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 will read more, because
in
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apply
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 are not able to skip, so you will read more.
As a result
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, they are better
in
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at
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 reading.
For example
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,
analezes
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analyses
 show that the
people
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use
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 to look for new
event
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events
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 are 17
percent
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 faster in reading , which means they are able to read more and
less
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spend less
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 time than the average.
On the other hand
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, humans who
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 other media,
such
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phones
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phone
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phone,
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 are more likely to be adolescents because not only
they
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were they
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 born in
time
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a time
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 were
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phone
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phones
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was
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were
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 much common, but
also
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apply
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newspaper
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newspapers
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are
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became much older.
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,
people
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 who prefer
phones
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 to look for the current
events
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 are likely to be
more
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apply
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faster for them to look for it, because
phones
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is
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 probably close to them.
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,
statistic
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statistics
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 show that
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humans
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 who
use
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 their
phone
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 are able to reach the event faster
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then
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than
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 the
people
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use
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 by 12
percent
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. In conclusion, I believe that using a
phone
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 to
know
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learn
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 about current
events
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 is better, because it is much easier and faster.

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structure
Your essay needs a clearer plan. Start with a short intro, then two body parts, and end with a clear conclusion.
planning
Make each paragraph about one idea. Start with a topic sentence and add a simple reason or example.
content
Use real and simple examples, not made numbers. Do not pretend to know facts you cannot prove.
language
Check your grammar and spell common words right. Learn common error words.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas fit. Words like first, also, but, so help a reader.
content
The writer tries to discuss both views and to give an opinion.
coherence
The essay has some attempt to use linking words.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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