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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the scores of
teams
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 A,
B
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, and
C
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 in 4 seasons: 2002, 2003, 2004, and 2005.
Overall
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,
Team
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B
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 achieved the highest
points
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 throughout the entire period with a significant difference.
Additionally
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, all the
teams
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 increased their scores in 2003 except for
team
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B
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, but they remained higher than the other two
teams
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. At the start of the recorded period in 2002,
Team
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B
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 scored the most
points
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 over the four seasons with 82
points
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, significantly surpassing the second-place
team
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 that year, which was
Team
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C
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 with 10
points
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, followed by
Team
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 A with 5
points
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.
Then
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, in the next season,
Team
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B
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's scores slightly decreased to 60;
however
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, it remained in first place compared to
Teams
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 A and
C
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, which scored 11 and 15
points
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, respectively. In the 2004 season,
Team
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 A showed a dramatic rise to 35
points
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, positioning themselves in second place,
while
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Team
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B
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 achieved slightly higher with 8
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points
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8-point
 difference,
whereas
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Team
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C
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 declined to 12
points
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. In 2005,
Team
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 A and
C
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 both showed a noticeable plunge to 8 and 5
points
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, respectively.
In contrast
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,
Team
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B
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's
points
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 jumped to 55
points
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teams, b, c, team, points with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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