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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030.
The shown line graph depicts the
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energy consumption in the USA from six fuels, namely
petrol
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 and
oil
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, coal, natural gas, nuclear, solar/wind, and
hydropower
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 over a period of 50 years, beginning in 1980, with projections until 2030. As is shown by the chart, most of these data witnessed an upward trend, but only one remained a downward trend , which was
hydropower
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.
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, the
petrol
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 and
oil
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 recorded the highest consumption,
whereas
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 nuclear, solar/wind , and
hydropower
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 were the lowest. Looking at the graph detail, one can see that
petrol
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 and
oil
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 stood at 35 quadrillion
units
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, followed by natural gas at approximately 20, and coal at over 15 in 1980. The data
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petrol
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 and
oil
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 fell slightly by around 31
units
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 in 1985, but
then
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 increased steadily, reaching about 40
units
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 by 2005, and are projected to reach 50
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 2030. Coal consumption grew unbroken and
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 the top in 28
units
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.
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, natural gas fluctuated between 20 and 25
units
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 and is projected to remain stable in 2030. In terms of the figures for nuclear power
units
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, the number increased from about 4 quadrillion
units
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 in 1980 to nearly 10 in 2030. Solar/wind decreased slowly by about 3
units
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 in 1995,
then
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 went on
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at
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 5
in
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 2030.
Hydropower
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 fluctuates around 3 to 4
units
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 over the period shown.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words petrol, oil, hydropower, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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