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The process shows the paper production and recycling

The pictures illustrate the
process
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 of
paper
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 production and recycling, which takes place in a factory.
Overall
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, there are ten steps, among which the main ones are cutting down the trees, chipping, pulp pressing and printing
newspapers
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 and collecting the old ones. At
first,
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trees are cut down and delivered to the factory. There, bark is removed, after which the wood is transformed into wood
chippings
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chips
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 using the chipper. Those
chippings
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chips
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then
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 go to the refiner
and
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, and
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 the
process
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 of pulping begins. Once finished, pulp is pressed and
paper
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 is rolled.
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paper
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 is later used to print
newspapers
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. Turning to the
process
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 of recycling, used
newspapers
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 are collected and distributed to the factory again. First of all, ink is removed and
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 the procedure of pulping starts. Pulp pressing happens, after which
paper
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 is rolled and new
newspapers
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 are printed on it.
This
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 recycling
process
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 is cyclical and repeats all the time.

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task response
Add a clear view at the start and a short end note. It helps the reader see the whole topic.
coherence cohesion
Link steps with simple words like then, next, after that to help flow.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repeating the same idea. Be exact about each step.
content
The essay talks about both how paper is made and how it is recycled.
structure
It uses words like overall and first of all to show order.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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