Your next-door neighbor often listens to loud music at night. Due to the loud music, you often struggle to sleep and experience frequent headache . Write to building manager about this problem

Dear Building
manager
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, I am writing
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letter to inform you about
ongoing
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the ongoing
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problem with my
neighbor
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neighbour
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, who often listens
music
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to music
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too
loud
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at night . Especially the music starts around 8pm and
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continues
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till after midnight.
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situation
impact
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to
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my daily sleep routine and it
lead
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leads
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to serious health problems. And
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it is
cousing
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causing
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stress
during
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at work. As you
know
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know,
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I work early morning, so after hardworking
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days,
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I feel that I am tired,so
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I want to relax working
days' nights
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. I would like to suggest that you remind all residents of
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the building
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building
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building's
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quiet hours policy and, if
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possible,
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speak
wit
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my
neighbor
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about keeping calm during the night. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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another
neighbors
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wanted to sleep at
nights
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night
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without noise, who lived near us. Thank you for understanding
of
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my
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and I hope we can resolve
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problem in
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this
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days. Your sincerely, Mira

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grammar
Use short, clear sentences and fix verb forms.
structure
Put each idea in its own paragraph.
style
Keep the words simple and use plain talk.
tone
Close with a polite ending.
grammar
Check spelling and comma use.
content
The letter tells the problem and its effect on sleep.
purpose
It asks for action from the building manager.
tone
The tone is polite in greeting and closing.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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