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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have changed your job describe your new job tell him/her your other news

Dear, Melina How are you, Mel? I hope you are doing well. It has been a long time since we
met
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last met
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last
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year
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. I want to tell you that right now
i'm
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I'm
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 working in a new company. I
work
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 as an associate photographer
in
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at
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 Marfel Photoworks.  You know, it has been my dream to
work
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 as
photographer
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a photographer
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. I am really happy that
i
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I
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 can
work
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 in
this
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 company, because
i
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I
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 can choose my own schedule and the time is very flexible. That
lead
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 me to have
a
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good mental health and not easily get
a burn
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burned
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 out. Not like my past job, which
is
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 very tiring because I
should
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had to
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work
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 from Monday to Friday and from 9 to 5. By the way, do you remember Sisca? I just met her
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 night
while
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 doing
a grocery
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groceries
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. She is
right now
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 staying in Malang with her husband. She
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also
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is also
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 starting a new florist business. Maybe we can do a reunion next month when u come back? We can do a cafe hopping since there
is
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are
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 plenty of
a
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new cafes in Malang. Sounds so fun
right
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, right
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? Well,
i
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I
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 hope
this
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 message finds you well. I'm really waiting for your response! With Love, Jk.

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grammar
Fix big letters. Use I with a cap and start new ideas with a new line.
structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph so the letter is easy to read.
vocabulary
Use simple words. Check small slips like 'i' or 'u' and keep a friendly tone.
greeting
Close with a warm sign-off, like 'Love, John' and a comma after Dear.
content
You tell why you left the old job and what you like about the new one.
tone
You say you want to meet and ask about your friend, which is kind.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I started a new job
  • I left my old job
  • I changed my job
  • why I changed job
  • I wanted to learn more
  • I wanted a better fit
  • I wanted a better work life balance
  • the old job did not fit
  • the new job is a good fit
  • title: project helper
  • I work with a team
  • my main tasks are
  • plan small projects
  • keep track of tasks
  • help the team
  • talk to clients
  • answer emails
  • keep files in order
  • the work is busy
  • I like it
  • I learn new things every day
  • the office is near my home
  • the people are friendly
  • I am happy with the move
  • my other news
  • I joined a weekend club
  • I cook more at home
  • I plan to visit
  • write back
  • take care
  • your friend
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