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Many countries believe that hosting international sporting events like Olympics or World Cup is a great idea. Others think it is a huge mistake. Give the adaavantages and disadvantages of hosting international sporting events.

Hosting international sporting
events
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 like the Olympics or
World
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the World
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 Cup is a big decision for any
country
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. Some
people
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 think it is a great idea , but others think it is a huge mistake.
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 essay will discuss the advantages and
disadvantages
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 of hosting international sporting
events
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. One advantage,
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event
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 will help economic countries. When a
country
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 hosts an international sporting
event
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, a
lot
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 of
people
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 will visit
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this
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the
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country
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. They spend money on hotels, restaurants and shopping,
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 is helps create a
lot
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 of jobs and increases business local
country
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.
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, the World Cup 2018 in Russia had a
lot
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 of visitors. Another advantage,
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event
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 can help make
this
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country
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 famous. Everyone in the world will see all match game on TV and they can see the culture of
this
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country
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.
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 will help many
people
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 visit
this
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country
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 in the future. But,
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 has some
disadvantages
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. Hosting international sporting
events
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 will make a
lot
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 of money.
government
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The government
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 needs to build a stadium, a hotel and traffic. If
nation
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a nation
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 doesn't make enough benefit from the
event
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,
they
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it
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 can lose a
lot
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. In history, some countries have had to dept a
lot
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 when hosting international sporting
events
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. Other
disadvantages
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,
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this
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event
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 will cause traffic congestion, noise and police. Local
people
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 can feel uncomfortable because
visitorsare alot
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visitors are a lot
, and the government has spent a
lot
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 of money on police. In conclusion, hosting international sporting
events
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 has advantages and
disadvantages
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. The nation should think a
lot
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 before deciding to host international sporting
events
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.

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task response
Plan more. Put one idea in each paragraph. Have a clear intro that says what you will talk about, and a conclusion that sums up your view.
coherence and cohesion
Make the flow of ideas smooth. Use simple linking words like and, but, so to show how ideas fit together.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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