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Many countries believe that hosting international sporting events like Olympics or World Cup is a great idea. Others think it is a huge mistake. Give the adaavantages and disadvantages of hosting international sporting events.

A lot of
countries
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 have hosted international
sport
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sports
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events
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,some have considered
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 a mistake,
while
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 others have taken
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 as a great opportunity.There are a number of advantages and disadvantages of hosting the Olympics or the World Cup.There are more advantages that outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand,hosting
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Sports
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events
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 encourages a lot of revenue circulation,
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 as money generated
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 tourism activities during the hosting period.Many hotels and lodges get booked to accommodate fans coming from different
countries
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 to watch the games.Taxi drivers
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 get to benefit ,as they would transport people to and from different destinations.For companies that have restaurants and bars become very busy during
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 time.
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,most tourists hardly cook food
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 their busy schedules,
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 they would go to restaurants to eat and drink alcohol.
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 brings more money to the establishments and the value chain.
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,there is an increase in crime taking place in cities where these international
sports
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 games take place.There are reports of thefts taking place in different parts of the city because of unethical individuals.
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 results in tourists exiting the
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 disappointed and vowing never to attend
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 games.
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,many have speculated that during international
sports
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events
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, many phones have been stolen at a record number of
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 million. In conclusion,hosting international
sports
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events
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 is a great idea, as it is a source of revenue for the country hosting.
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 benefits business entities in which all benefit in the value chain.There are more advantages experienced by hosting
countries
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 than there are disadvantages.

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Task response
Plan your essay with a clear view at the end. Restate your main idea in the last line.
Structure
Use 3 clear parts: intro, one body on good points, one body on bad points, and a short conclusion.
Examples
Give small, clear examples. Avoid big or wrong numbers and keep facts simple.
Coherence
Use linking words to move from one idea to the next. This makes the read easier.
Grammar
Fix grammar and punctuation. Put a space after commas and periods. Start new sentences with a capital letter.
Lexical
Use common, simple words. Don’t use long or hard words.
Content
The essay shows a clear view that one side is stronger.
Structure
There is a basic split with two sides; on the one hand and on the other.
Content
Some good ideas about money and travel are used.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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