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Some universities now offer their course so that people can study online. Is it a positive or negative development.

Nowadays, some
university
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 provides online
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course
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courses
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 for
students
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 to study from various
environment
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environments
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.
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 some people believe that
this
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 can offer
opportunity
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an opportunity
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 for
students
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in
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from
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 various backgrounds, others
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are concern
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concern
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 that it may negatively affect
communication
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skills
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 needed for working in
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society. I strongly believe that
this
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 is a positive development
due to
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 expanding chances of
education
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 to
students
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 from all financial backgrounds
y
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by
adapt
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adopting
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balanced
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a balanced
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 program of both online and traditional
courses
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.
To begin
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 with, some people claim online
courses
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 can limit
student's
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students'
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 opportunity of learning
face-to -face
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face-to-face
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communication
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 during
university
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, which helps them prepare for their future work.
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, after
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic, many youngsters struggled with
real life
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real-life
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communication
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such
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, such
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 as interface
communication
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 and calling
client
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clients
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 on
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the telephones
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telephones
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telephone
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 in their workplace
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due
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, due
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 to
little
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the limited
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 experience they
gone through
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gained
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 at school.
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,
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apply
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 relying solely on online lessons
have
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has
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possible
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a possible
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 disadvantage, it can be addressed by combining traditional lectures.
On the other hand
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, there are merits of universities offering online
courses
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. It makes
education
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acccessible
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accessible
 for
students
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in
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from
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 poor financial
background
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backgrounds
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.
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, some children in poor
country
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countries
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 have limited
chance
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access
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 to
each
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apply
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educational
institutes
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institutions
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, which
lead
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leads
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 to
negative
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a negative
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 spiral of poverty. They only obtain
low salary
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low-salary
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 work
due to
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limited
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the limited
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skills
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 and knowledge they
acquire
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have acquired
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.
Education
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 helps them
out
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get out
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from
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of
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 the endless loop of the negative spiral, and makes them live
in
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on
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 a stable income.
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,
online
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an online
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course
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 can be recorded and viewed several times. It can help
students
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 who have health problems to keep their own pace to fully attend classes
demanded
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required
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 for graduation.
However
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, it is undeniable that there are practical
skills
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 that
requires
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require
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 hands-on lessons in some domains. In
these
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this
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 case, balanced
courses
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 can be
provides
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provided
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 for effective
education
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. In my view, online lessons
in
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at
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university
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 have both
advantage
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advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.
Balanced
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 program in each
course
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 enables
students
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 to access
ideal
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an ideal
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education
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.
Such
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 as providing online
courses
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 with hands-on practice for a short period can address both
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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while
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 accepting the
advantage
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advantages
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. In conclusion,
while
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 some people claim online
education
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 in
university
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 can affect
communication
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skills
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, others believe it
widen
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widens
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 opportunities to individuals from all financial
background
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backgrounds
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. I strongly believe that
balanced
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a balanced
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 program of the traditional face-to-face
course
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 and online
course
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 can be effective
to
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for
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 all
students
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grammar
Split long ideas into short, clear sentences. Use simple grammar and a clear subject and verb.
task management
Say your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it the same through the essay.
content development
Give one clear example for each point and show how it backs your point.
editing
Check small spell and word form errors and fix them.
coherence
Use linking words to show contrast and addition, like 'but', 'also', 'in addition'.
content
The writer shows a clear view that a mix of online and in-person study can work.
structure
There is a short end that restates the view.
content
The essay talks about both sides of the issue.
content
Some small reasons and notes are used to back points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • access
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • benefit
  • problem
  • solution
  • important
  • choice
  • time
  • place
  • home
  • study
  • student
  • university
  • course
  • online
  • learn
  • teach
  • cost
  • save
  • tech
  • internet
  • support
  • quality
  • risk
  • future
  • job
  • mix
  • hybrid
  • face-to-face
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