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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people , however, think that other types of progress are equally imporant for a country. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There is no denying the fact that economic
progress
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 is essential for each
country
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.
This
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important
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the important
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 goal
to
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of
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 many
goverments
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governments
 is economic
progress
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and
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, and
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if
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whether
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 other types of
progress
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 are equally important for
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country
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a country
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.
To begin
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 with, there
many
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are many
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 people
think
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who think
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 that economic
progress
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 is
most
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the most
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improtant
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important
 goal to
imrpove
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improve
any
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a
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country
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country's
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 income.
Fristly
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Firstly
, every
goverment
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government
need
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needs
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 to build itself
to
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into
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strong
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a strong
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economy
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otherwaies
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otherwise
ti
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it
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 will be
diffcult
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difficult
.
In addition
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variaty
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variety
 of
economy
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 is
also
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 essential to
insure
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ensure
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growth
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the growth
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 of
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economy
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the economy
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 is
continous
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continuous
 and
do
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does
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 not depend
in
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on
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 only limit type,
for
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example
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example,
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 oil and
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tourism
toursim
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toursim,
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that
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which
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 will great gap in the future.
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, the most important factor that will support the
economic
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economy
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 is
manufacture
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manufacturing
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becuease
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because
 it is
wide
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a wide
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feild
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field
 in our time now. In terms of
,
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apply
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 other types of
progress
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 are equally important for a
country
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, take
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. Take
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 care of important facilities in each
goverment
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government
 and try to make it
aproporiate
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appropriate
 for tourism and
confortable
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comfortable
 is
essential
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also essential
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also
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 for
citizen
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citizens
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that help
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
economy
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 and
in
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at
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 the same time will lead to
imropve
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improving
 all of
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the country
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country
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country's
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 facilities.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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stongly
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strongly
 the
relashship
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relationship
 with other
goverments
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governments
 that will help each
country
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 in their
diffcult
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difficult
 time.
For
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instance
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instance,
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 in 1991 when Iraq war to Kuwait
the
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, the
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 USA and Saudi Arabia
help
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helped
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kuwait
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Kuwait
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 to win. In conclusion,
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there
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 are no easy answers to
this
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 question.On balance,
however
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, I believe that
goverments
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governments
 need to strongly
and
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promote and
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variation
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vary
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 in economic
progress
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 and it
os
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is
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 the most
imprtant
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important
 goal.

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weakness
Work on grammar and spelling to make ideas clear.
technique
Use better linking words to show how ideas fit.
content
Give one or two clear examples to support your point.
structure
Provide a clear opinion in the last part.
content
The essay shows an attempt to discuss both sides of the issue.
structure
Introduction and conclusion are present.
content
There is a clear topic and a sense of argument.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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