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The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
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show
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 the average household expenditures in
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japan
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Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 for
year
Correct article usage
the year
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 2010.
Overall
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,
bettwen
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between
two
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the two
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 charts
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, japan
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japan
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Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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families
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families'
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 expenditures for other goods and services
around
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are around
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 20%. In
addtion
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addition
, families spend around 30%
for
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on
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 housing and food. The chart shows us
the
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that the
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less
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lowest
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 number in transport is around 10% and 20% in both countries.
in
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In
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 return
the
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, the
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 health care is the
less
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lowest
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 number
6
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, 6
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% in
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japan
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Japan
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 and 3% in
Malaysia
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 . In coucloisen ,
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japan
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Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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household
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, household
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 expenditures
in
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on
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 housing
around
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are around
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 30% and the
less
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lowest
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 number in both
country
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countries
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 is health care
around
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, around
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 10%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spending
  • share
  • part
  • largest
  • smallest
  • big
  • biggest
  • house
  • housing
  • food
  • transport
  • utilities
  • education
  • health
  • recreation
  • clothing
  • others
  • percent
  • chart
  • show
  • indicate
  • similar
  • different
  • compare
  • in
  • Japan
  • in Malaysia
  • year
  • 2010
  • overall
  • pattern
  • feature
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