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A magazine wants to include contribution from its readers for an article called 'the book that influenced me most". Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influences you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about, explain how this book influenced you, say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

Dear Sir/ Madam, I
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this
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 letter to formally express my interest in contributing
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 an article
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, and
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,
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 I am a regular reader of your magazine and wanted to suggest
an
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a
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book
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 for the article called '
the
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The Book That Influenced Me Most
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book
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 that influenced me most'. I trust your esteemed organisation would address
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 request promptly. To provide context, I regularly read books of different
kind
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, and here I would like to suggest the
book
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 which had a huge impact
in
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on
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 my
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, the
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. The
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book
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 gives
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 great understanding of why a person should never give up on their dreams.
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, the name of the
book
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 is " Why not?"
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,
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This
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book
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 has
significant
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a significant
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 role in my
life
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 because
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 it not only helped to survive
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cancer but
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 gave me
courage
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the courage
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 to share my story
to
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with
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 others.
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, I was affected by Blood cancer and I lost all
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hopes
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 to
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 my
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 because
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 doctors
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 gave up on my case
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 after reading
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book
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book,
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 I felt motivated and fought with cancer and survived it. In light of the above, I respectfully suggest that
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book
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 will have
great
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a great
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 effect on other readers too. Because
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this
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book
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 will help people to feel motivated and improve their
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life style
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lifestyle
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. I sincerely appreciate your attention to
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 request. Thank you for your time. Yours sincerely, Aayush Updhyay

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coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea only; use short links to join ideas.
grammar
Fix the small grammar errors, like 'I writing' to 'I am writing'.
grammar
Use 'a book' instead of 'an book'.
style
Keep sentences short and simple for easy reading.
greeting
Close well with 'Yours sincerely,' and your name.
content
The letter has a real feel and shows the writer's life story.
content
The title of the book is named and the effect is clear.
format
The tone fits a letter to the editor.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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