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Band 5.5

A magazine wants to include contribution from its readers for an article called 'the book that influenced me most". Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influences you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about, explain how this book influenced you, say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

Dear Editor, I hope you are well. I am writing to contribute to your article “The
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 That Influenced Me Most” regarding Do It Right Now by Dr. Parekh. Could you please include my thoughts in your upcoming edition? The main focus of
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 is overcoming procrastination.
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, it explains why people delay starting new things or simple routine tasks, and it offers practical steps to take immediate action.
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 has encouraged me to stop overthinking and start working on my goals right away.
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, it gave me a clear plan to manage my time in a better way.
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, I have
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 more productive and confident in completing my work on time. If I had not applied the advice from
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, I would still be wasting hours
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ignoring important tasks. I would appreciate it if more readers could learn about
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 and benefit from its clear and
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 guidance. To inspire others, I suggest
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 a short summary of Do It Right Now in your article. Could you
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 share a few tips from the
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 for readers to try immediately? Thank you very much for your attention and support. I look forward to seeing
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book
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 mentioned in your article, and I hope it can help others as much as it helped me.
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 so much for your time. Yours sincerely, Avi Patel

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grammar
Fix small grammar errors like 'As a result, I have became' (change to 'I have become') and 'to ignoring' (change to 'to ignore'). Also correct 'Thankyou' to 'Thank you'.
structure
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and make the first sentence of each para state that idea.
content
When you name the book, use the full title and author clearly so readers know what you mean.
coherence
Use simple link words to connect ideas, so the reading is easy and smooth.
tone
End with a short line that restates your view or asks the editor to publish.
tone
Polite and warm tone with good respect to the editor.
content
Shows clear link between the book and your own life and actions.
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Offers a real wish to share more tips in the article.
coherence
Has ready ideas to help readers, like a short summary and tips.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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