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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mian features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps give detailed information about how
city
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the city
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 hospital
developped
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developed
 over time.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was a dramatic change in the structure of
hospital
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the hospital
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, particularly in the development of
road
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 infrastructure. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that public services, including
car
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park
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parks
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 and bus
station
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stations
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, witnessed significant changes. Looking at the details, in
2007
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2007,
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 there was a ring
road
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, the city hospital and a main hospital highway. Six bus stands were located infirmary on the thoroughfare.
Moreover
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,
staff
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the staff
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car
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park
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 and
public
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the public
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car
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park
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 were situated on the east side of
main
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the main
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road
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.
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, regarding the second map, the ring
road
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retained
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remained
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 unchanged around the healthcare facility. The public
car
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park
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 was transformed to the right of
city
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the city
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 hospital
and
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, and
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 the staff
car
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park
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has
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apply
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remained stable in 2010. There were established 2 roundabouts
established
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were established
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and
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, and
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 a bus station was put up south-west of the clinic route.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • infrastructure
  • modifications
  • traffic flow
  • arterial road
  • roundabout
  • one-way system
  • pedestrian paths
  • public transportation
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • bypass
  • congestion
  • diverted traffic
  • upgraded facilities
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