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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below illustrate the layout of Beechwood farmland in 1950, and how it has changed up to the present.
It is clear that
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, despite significant changes in land use, with the farm having been turned
to
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 a recreational area, some green spaces have remained untouched.
Additionally
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, the farm has been equipped with cutting-edge facilities to provide electricity and amenities. The road crossing the river in the northwestern corner of the map
,
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 has remained unchanged, and so have the green areas in the
center
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centre
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 of the site. The area which was allocated for planting fruits and vegetables, on the right side of the river, still exists.
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, a farm shop has been built on the northern side of the fruit tree area. The former tracks have been converted into new roads
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 two new parking areas have been constructed at the beginning and end of the main road. There used to be a tremendous field for sheep on the upper side of the map, which has now been replaced by a camping field and some solar panels. In the southeast part of the map, the barn has been replaced by holiday cottages and relocated next to the farmhouse and the chicken field, both of which remain in their original locations.

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task response
Task response: You show the changes well, but add a short intro at the start to say what you will tell about. End with one sentence that sums up the big change. Make sure you list all the main changes from both map and present views.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use a clear plan with 3 parts (intro, first body, second body). Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, next. Keep sentences short and clear.
overview
Clear lead line that says what is the same and what changed.
detail
Many exact changes are named from the old map to the new map.
cohesion
Good use of joining words to move from one idea to the next.

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