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Band 3.5

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe
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 that only physical
strength
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 is important for success in sport, but
others
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others'
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 opinion about it is
diffrent
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different
. They think that mental health and
strength
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is
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are
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 more valuable
thing
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. In
this
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essay
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 I will provide both points of view for
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 question and will give my opinion. I have
balanced
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a balanced
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 view about the skills which are useful for
athlets
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athletes
.
Firstly
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,
strength
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 is
main
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 skill for
sportmens
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sportsmen
. They should train every day to
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 their power. Because without
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power
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 they could not perform and show great
results
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. Many trainers around the world think that only physical performance is
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 main reason to increase
results
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 in
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competitions or games. Even they try to use
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medecine
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medicine
 to
make
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achieve
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 high and fast
results
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.
On the other hand
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, mental health and
power
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its power
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of
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it
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,
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 could be more useful.
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, when you have
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 really good schedule of the day, time for training, sleeping,
working
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and working
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time
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. You can be
more happy
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happier
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 and well-being. If you do not have any stress, your
perfomance
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performance
 could be higher. I think you should have balanced
trainings
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training
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 in all your
task
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. You need to have time for work,
trainings
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training
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and
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 to relax.
To sum up
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, a group of people who think that only
strength
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 is
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an importaint
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importaint
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important
 thing in sport are false. All skills are valuable to have good
results
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 in life and sport. Only balanced way of life, could really give
results
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.

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structure
Plan your writing. Put one main idea in each paragraph and finish with your own view.
coherence
Use clear links to show how ideas fit. Start with a short intro, then two sides, then your view.
language
Check spell and word use. Use easy words and short lines.
content
The essay shows both sides and has a clear view.
structure
There is a closing idea.
content
Some good ideas are shown.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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