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Band 1.5

You have eaten at a restaurant and it was such a terrible experience that you have decided to inform the manager by letter of what happened and that you want your money back. Things to include: – Facts. You need to be concise but explain what happened. – Polite. No one responds to insults. – Outline what you wish from this. What do you want to happen? – Firmness. You want to be taken seriously.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter to report an unfavourable experience at your restaurant.
Last
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 Friday, I ordered two plates of chicken rice
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 and three cups of coffee. It took more than two hours to serve us food. The waiter served us three plates of rice. When I asked
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him, he told me I ordered only two. When
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 received the bill, they included the price of three plates. I talked to the manager
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 he did not accept the mistake. I had to pay for all of them. I am requesting
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refund my money for the third plate. You should pay attention towards it so that other customers cannot face
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 kind of experience. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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language
Be clear from the start what you want. State your main aim in one or two lines.
language
Keep one idea per sentence and use simple, common words. Check your grammar and spelling (I, not i; arrived, not arrive).
tone
Use a polite tone. Do not use words that could sound harsh or like a threat.
structure
Make the order of ideas clear: what happened, then the bill, then the answer from staff, and finally what you want.
content
The letter states the issue and what you want.
tone
The closing line is polite and shows hope for a quick reply.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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