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Water shortage is becoming an increasingly problem in many parts of the world. What are the causes and effects of this issue, and what solutions can be taken to address it? Do you think that social media can help to spread awareness among people?

Water
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 drought is becoming
more
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a more
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 alarming and dangerous
issues
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issue
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 in the
world
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world,
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result
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resulting
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 in numerous outcomes. In
this
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 essay, I am going to demonstrate the
consequences
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 of
this
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 matter
as well as
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 point out some effective measures. Personally, I do believe that social platforms or newspapers can aid in promoting awareness among
people
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.
Myriad
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 of
consequences
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 are related to
this
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up-rising
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 problems, namely, health issues, economic decline,
food
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 shortages, and social instability.
First,
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water
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 is essential for raising livestock and irrigating crops to produce
food
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 for human consumption,
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 in
food
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shortage
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shortages
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 and leading to monetary depression.
Secondly
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,
besides
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food
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,
water
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 is another fundamental
contributing
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 to
human’s
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 well-being.
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, if
people
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 were not to get an adequate amount of
water
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 to sustain basic activities
such
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 as hydrating themselves, cooking, and cleaning, their mental health will be severely impacted. Despite negative
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consequences
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 the governments and residents can take some solutions to address the issues of dehydration
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such
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, such
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 as implementing strict policies on individuals who waste
water
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.
Morover
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Moreover
, it would be more effective if we
organize
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campaignes
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campaigns
 or include
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water saving
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water-saving
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lesson
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lessons
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 in school
curriculums
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instead
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 of punishing them. The influence of social
media
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 in spreading information is undeniable, and
although
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 they are often
criticized
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criticised
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 for distributing negative content, I believe that they can
also
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 play a positive role in raising awareness when used wisely. It is evident that social
media
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 is globally available, allows many
people
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 to click,
comments
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comment
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 and share posts about the importance of preserving the
water
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 resources.
For example
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,
organizing
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organising
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canpaignes
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campaigns
 or
volunteer
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 requires
large
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a large
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 amount of budget and may not be
effective
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as effective
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 as posts on social
media
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such
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 as Facebook or Instagram because these social
plarforms
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platforms
attracts
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attract
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 more users and they can easily access and read. In conclusion,
water
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 shortage can be associated with either positive or negative
consequences
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.
Therefore
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, some solutions can be taken into consideration, namely, implementing
water
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-saving policies,
campaignes
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campaigns
,
deploying
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and deploying
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 punishment on individuals who waste
water
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. From my observation, social
media
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 is one of the most effective
solution
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solutions
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 to tackle
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this
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these
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 problems via spreading awareness among
people
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.

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structure
Plan your essay. Start with a short intro that restates the topic and your view. Then write 2-3 clear body paragraphs. End with a short conclusion.
grammar
Use simple grammar. Check tenses and word order. Clean up long sentences and spellings.
content
Give clear cause, effect, and fix. Do not mix many ideas in one long sentence.
coherence
Use linking words like first, also, but, and, so to show how ideas go together.
spelling
Spell common words right and avoid hard words. Use easy words from the top 100 words.
task potential
The writer talks about how social media can help spread news.
content
There are ideas on water save and how policies can help.
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