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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and mount of thime spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the informationn by selecting and reporting the ain features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and mount of thime spent doing house work in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the informationn by selecting and reporting the ain features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The supplied line graphs depict the changes in ownership of electric appliances and how
many
Fix the agreement mistake
much
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 time they spent
to do
Wrong verb form
doing
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 housework and household
between
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chores between
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 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, from
quick
Correct article usage
a quick
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looking
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look
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, we see the percentage of households with electric
like
Change preposition
apply
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washing
machine
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machines
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 and
Refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 increase to 100%
Inititally
Correct your spelling
Initially
,
number
Correct article usage
the number
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 of housework per week, their household deerease from50% in
1920s
Correct article usage
the 1920s
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 To around 30 in
1940s
Correct article usage
the 1940s
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 ,
while
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 being 20% in
1960s
Correct article usage
the 1960s
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.
Then
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 stay in 15% for 20 years in 2019
decrease
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decreased
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 to 10%. Moving to the first chart, and
1920s
Correct article usage
the 1920s
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Punctuation problem
, they
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they
Use the right word
the
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Refigerator
Correct your spelling
refrigerator
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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 from 5% to 55%
whereas
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 Washing
machine
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machines
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start
Wrong verb form
started
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 from 40% to 60% in
2019
Punctuation problem
2019,
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 washing machine being around Refigeratorbeing in 2019 100%.
Then
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vacuum
Correct article usage
the vacuum
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 cleaner
start
Correct subject-verb agreement
starts
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 from 30%
to be
Verb problem
apply
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in 2019 100%.
At the end
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, the line graph
illustrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
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 the decrease and any increase
for
Change preposition
in
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 changes and ownership of electric appliances and
amount
Correct article usage
the amount
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 of time spent doing housework in
household
Fix the agreement mistake
households
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 in one country.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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