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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

some consumers are increasing choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. what are reasons for this? is this a positive or negative trend?

These days, residents are prone to purchase domestic
grocery
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groceries
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instead
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 of international commodities on account to various factors, I reckon
this
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 will boost the local economy to some extent. Compared with the products
manfactured
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manufactured
 by other countries or regions, local produce is fresh and
quality-trustworth
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quality-trustworthy
.
Uaually
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Usually
, if
necessarities
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necessaries
such
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 as diary, fruit, vegetables are
transfered
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transferred
 from
faraway
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a faraway
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 place, it's
probally
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probably
 not in good condition unless using chemical
compont
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compounds
 to maintain.
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, it's much easier for consumers to track the
producing
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production
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 date,
producing
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production
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 permission, even the producers'
adress
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address
, which would reduce the worry about unhealthy food.
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, I prefer going to our community farm to pick
daily
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a daily
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supplyment
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supply
 over big supermarkets
where
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that
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 have a lot of imported items, because I feel relatively safe about what I eat. Aside from that,
local
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prioritising local
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 commodities in priority is good for community development. Local farms,
manufactures
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manufacturers
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, and business
orgnizations
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organisations
 provide a large number of
employment
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jobs
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 for dwellers in
this
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 area.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, citizens choose
domastic
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domestic
 goods may construct a chain of
self-produce
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self-production
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 and
self-sufficent
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self-sufficiency
 which undoubtedly
benefit
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benefits
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 our communities'
welbeing
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well-being
. To summarise,
consummers
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consumers
 would
chose
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choose
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 local produce rather than international products is
atrributed
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attributed
its
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to its
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fressment
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freshness
 and
hign
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high
 quality, and
this
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populity
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popularity
also
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trigger
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triggers
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 a constructive
devepment
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development
 to the community.

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planning
Plan your essay before writing. Make a small plan with your position and the two or three main points you will use.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a clear topic sentence and use links to move to the next point.
language
Fix spelling and grammar. Use short, simple sentences and common words. Check common errors by reading your work aloud.
examples
Give more than one example. A local farm is good, but add another example to show how local goods help people and town.
content
The essay has a clear view that buying local goods can help the town.
content
You give ideas about how local goods may be safer and fresher.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable consumption
  • supporting local businesses
  • community development
  • cultural heritage
  • self-sufficiency
  • environmental sustainability
  • imported goods
  • fresh produce
  • consumer preference
  • local producers
  • organic products
  • economic impact
  • carbon emissions
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