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Describe changes in Felixstone between 1967 and 2001.

The maps illustrate key information regarding the changes that occurred in the Felixstone area in the years 1967 and 2001.
Overall
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, it's clear from the graph that Felixstone experienced significant development, especially in places and services for visitors.
In addition
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, public and private beaches were added,
whereas
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 the fish market, the marina, and the pier were removed.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1967, Felixstone had a golf course, a high street , farmland, and shops to the north. To the south, there were trees, dunes, a hotel, and a cafe. a fish market, a marina with a pier. The region appeared more rural and less civilised . In terms of 2001, the farmlands were replaced with a hotel, a swimming pool, and tennis courts. Some shops became apartments, and the turbines were installed near the dunes. A large car park was added near the hotel, and the marina, the pier were removed to make room for the beaches.

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task response
Task response: You cover the main idea and give facts about 1967 and 2001, but some details are not clear or may not be exact. Try to stay to what the maps show and be precise about each change.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: The flow could be clearer. Use linking words like First, Then, After that, and put 1967 in one paragraph and 2001 in another. Check punctuation and use simple, same sentence start.
overview
Clear overall view of changes.
detail
Gives some specific changes for both years.

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