In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

For the majority of
countries
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,
consumer
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consumers
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can go to a supermarket and purchase
food
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that
made
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is made
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all over the world. In
this
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essay, I'll explain
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both sides. I believe that contributing all edible things regardless
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of country
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would be interesting ,because we can taste every dish, desserts,
food
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and vegetables all over the world.
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means we are
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getting to known
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known
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the taste of
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countries
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a country's
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culture by eating the traditional things.
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, there can be some other benefits which can
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introduce other cultures by tasting their meal.
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,
children
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would
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be curious
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about other
countries
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even
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, even
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the continents. By sensing the aroma
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children
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, children
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taste
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can
be
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develop their sense and get
know
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to know
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each country.
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improve our development of trade in the
food
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section. On the other
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,
unknown
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an unknown
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source of
food
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can be really harmful for all
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of people
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people of
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, especially
the
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children
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. Because
children
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tend to buy
looking
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by looking
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at the picture of snacks which
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look
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interesting and buy without supervision. So it could be
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an issue
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for health.
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,
supermarket
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a supermarket
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is larger than any grocery store
and
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or
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convience
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convenience
store, so it is harder to look
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for the
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expired
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date. Many
countries
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supply their
products
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with
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to
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the bigger supermarkets
and
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, and
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that can be risky because
every
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not every
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employees
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employee
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can
not
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look for the date.
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, that could be negative development. In the conclusion,
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contributing
products
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can be interesting,
also
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make
boundries
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boundaries
with the culture by tasting their
products
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. But it is dangerous if the
products
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are
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come from
unknown
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an unknown
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sourse
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source
, because it is harmful for the health
especially
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, especially
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kids
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for kids
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.
Also
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, supplying big supermarkets could be hard to look for the
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expiration
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dates.

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planning
Plan first. Say your main view in one line and keep it.
grammar
Use easy and correct grammar. Check verb form and plural s.
coherence
Use linking words so ideas fit well, like also, but, for example.
examples
Give real and simple examples to back each point.
editing
Make short, clean sentences. Check spell of 'source' and 'supermarket'.
content
You try to talk about both sides.
content
You touch ideas on health and culture.
coherence
You use some link words to join ideas.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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