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Band 4

Some people believe that individuals can do little to improve the environment. Only governments and large companies can make a real difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that some people think that
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 can do little
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nature,
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other believe the government and companies make
huge
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 difference.
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 it is a commonly held
belife
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belief
 that individuals have less skills in knowledge. There is
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 an argument that the companies and governments make a better real-life.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of
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 and express my opinion. On one hand, some people studying in
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of
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majors that lead to
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 the
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education
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human
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.
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other
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 hand, if the person
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 a school or
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that
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become
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 more
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valuable
 to the
contry
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country
.
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, time keeping is
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good for
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 your ideas and
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subjects
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.
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, in 2009, there was one guy
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 a project for traffic and
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 a memorable solution for all.
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, the company need the
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 experience to do the projects
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 as
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bridge
, street and tower. It is
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 possible to say that the
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governments
 need to hire it less
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years
experience of
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people
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to help the
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country
to
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improve.
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, the ministry
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 with
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individuals to cover all the
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assessments
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 for
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 support the society.
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, a study
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hire
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 more employees to
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enhance
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 all the roads and towers is more valuable.  In conclusion, there is no easy
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 to
this
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 question. On balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that without the
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 you can not open any business or make the places
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. I prefer to
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to
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company
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a company
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 that helps me to get a lot of money so I can help my family to live
better
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a better
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 life.

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structure
State your view clearly in the first paragraph and keep it clear throughout the essay.
structure
Give two or three main points and connect them with linking words, so the flow is easier to follow.
language
Use simple and correct spelling and keep grammar simple; fix obvious errors.
content
Use specific and real examples to back up your points.
content
You try to cover both sides, which shows scope.
structure
You have a clear attempt to end with a view.
content
You make an effort to write about the topic even if the ideas are weak.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • conservation
  • corporate social responsibility
  • policy implementation
  • grassroots movement
  • environmental advocacy
  • legislation
  • systemic change
  • collective impact
  • green initiatives
  • pollution control
  • biodiversity
  • global warming
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