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The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050. (millions) Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features then make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows population figures for four countries for 2003 and projected figures for 2025 and 2050. (millions) Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features then make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information about
population
Correct article usage
the population
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 in four different countries and their rise over 23 years
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 what
would
Correct word order
apply
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this
Fix the agreement mistake
these
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 numbers
be
Correct word order
would be
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 in 2050.
Overall
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,Indonesia was the first country who have the
most
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largest
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 population
size
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apply
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in their country,
while
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 Argentina was the
four
Use the right word
fourth
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 and
last
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.Italy and Korea stayed second and third in
given
Correct article usage
the given
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 period. It can be seen,in Indonesia
number
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 of people saw a
significantly
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significant
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 rise,rising from 238
million
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 in 2003 to 274
million
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 in 2025.
In addition
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,in
2050
Punctuation problem
2050,
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this
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number
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 would increase to 312
million
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 and would stay in first place in
this
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 ranking. In Italy and Korea
number
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 of people was just under 55
million
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 in 2003,
then
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in
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apply
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Korea saw a rise in 2025 from 48 to 52,but would
stayed
Wrong verb form
stay at
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this
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number
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 in 2050.Interestingly,at the beginning,Argentina was the
last
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 nation with just above 30
million
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,but in 2025 increased to 48
million
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 and overpaced Italy in
this
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 race.
Moreover
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,these figures would be over twice as high as Italy in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population figures
  • projected figures
  • significant increase
  • significant decrease
  • growth rate
  • decline
  • trend
  • highlight
  • compare
  • economic development
  • birth rate
  • migration patterns
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