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Band 4

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. QTo what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many people view earning
money
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is
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 one of the most important
mission
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 in
thier
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their
 lives
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while
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 it's more vital to save
money
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, even
to
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 children. Since we aren't able to predict what will happen in future, we should always keep an amount of
money
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 with us to face unexpected
accident
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.
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, I suggest that saving
money
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 is something we must always keep in
our
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mind
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 matter how old we are. We work
had
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to make
money
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for
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to
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 support our living. After our earnings
is
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enouge
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enough
 to maintain our basic living standard, we may be eager to
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 we want but not in need,
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 as
lurxiouries
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luxuries
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travel
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,
jewelries
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jewellery
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 or even
sport
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 cars. There is
also
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 a sense of achievement
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 we spend
money
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 on what we like.
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, we should never forget to save
money
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 and be well prepared for
future
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. With saving
money
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, we are able to handle to difficulties when our income source is cut down someday that we could never predict.
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, saving
money
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provide
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 us with a sense of safety,
for example
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, we are able to pay a huge amount of
expense
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expenses
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 for a sudden without borrowing
money
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 from others. By teaching our younger people to
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 a
habitat
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habit
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 of saving
money
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, it can help them to understand that we should always be well prepared for the coming challenges or disasters as well.
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, asking our kids to save
money
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 can even make them avoid
from
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wasting everything they
owe
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 and cherish their belongings. In conclusion, saving
money
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 is a lesson which our children should have taken, which is a
habitat
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habit
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 that
make
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 a person
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succeed.

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task response
Be clear on how much you agree. State your view in the first line and keep it the same in all paragraphs.
task response
Add two or three ideas and give small real examples for each idea.
structure
Plan your essay. Use four parts: intro, 1st idea, 2nd idea, and a short finish.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use words like First, Also, Because, But, For example.
grammar
Check word form and spelling. Fix common errors like not, not enough, and end marks.
lexical
Use easy words clearly. Do not use hard words, but be more exact in meaning.
content
The essay shows a clear idea that saving money can help in hard times.
structure
There is a closing line that sums up the view.
style
The language is plain and easy to read with simple words.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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