The maps below show the village of stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

The maps below show the village of stokeford in 1930 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The maps below show the village of stokeford in 1930 and 2010.
The maps compare the development of a
village
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called Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. In general, the suburb underwent significant changes, including the removal of agricultural lands and the increase in housing areas. In 1930, the main
road
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ran through the
village
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from north to south, with a few
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resident properties, shops and a post office. There were
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a primary school and gardens along the
road
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. Farmlands were located in the northeast and southwest of the
village
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. We can
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see the River Stoke
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through the
village
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with a bridge crossing it.
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, in 2010, lands for agriculture disappeared
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the number of houses increased. The main
road
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branched off into 3 more new ones,
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the shops were removed. On the other side of the main
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, the school were expanded to two buildings
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however
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, gardens were cut by half, and the large house became a retirement
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home.
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During the period from 1930 to 2010, the river, bridge and post office remained unchanged.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words village, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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