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Band 3

Nowadays many people complain that they have dificulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

In our
modren
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modern
 time, quite a lot of people say that they have
dificulties
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difficulties
 with getting enough sleep. I absolutely believe that they have a lot of issues with the sleep Disadvantage
outweigh
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 the benefits. How
we can
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can we
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selove
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love
 it? There
is
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are
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 a lot of
problem
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problems
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 from the lack
sleep
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of sleep
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.
Firstly
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, they
are
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do
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 not sleep enough because
of
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apply
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they sleep late, or the atmosphere of the room is not
to
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conducive to
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 sleep. One of the
reason
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reasons
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 you didn't get enough sleep is the room. Maybe they didn't close all
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the light
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light
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lights
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.
Secondly
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, how
we can
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can we
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solution
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solve
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this
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 problem? They should sleep early. And close all lighting
well
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, well
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drink
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, drink
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.
warm
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Warm
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 milk and go to bed early
if
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. If
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 you sleep at 10
PM
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PM,
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 go to bed at 9 PM
super
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. Super
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 proper yourself for sleep. To sleep and be in a good
mood
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mood,
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 do yoga
for
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to
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 unwind and take a warm shower before I go to bed, put in your shower water salt for
bath
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a bath
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 to help you
get
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apply
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relax. In conclusion, we
said
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discussed
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 the
reason
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reasons
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 for
lack
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a lack
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of
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sleep and the
solution
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solutions
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 to get enough sleep.
However
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, when we want to sleep, we should know the way to let us have a comfortable enough, sleep without
wake
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waking
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 up from sleep, feel
teird
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tired
. One of
issues
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the issues
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 from lack
sleep
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of sleep
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, weight gain
the
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, the
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 reason of
increase
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an increase
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 in the secretion of the hormone "ghrelin"responsible for the feeling of
hungry
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hunger
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Cognitive function
  • Circadian rhythm
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Insomnia
  • REM sleep
  • Melatonin
  • Obstructive sleep apnea
  • Sleep disorders
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Chronotype
  • Mindfulness meditation
  • Sleep cycle
  • Blue light exposure
  • Sleep-inducing environment
  • Sleep therapy
  • Professional intervention
  • Stress management techniques
  • Biological clock
  • Sleep quality
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