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Band 4

Nowadays almost every student who graduates from high school tries to attend college or university. Why do you think people attend college or university?

There is no denying the fact that there are two ways to get a degree
by
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from
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Use synonyms
university
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a university
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 or college.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that students need to join a college or
university
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. There is
also
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 an argument that opposes it
, in
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. In
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 my opinion, I consider it important to go to education to learn more skills.
To begin
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 with, the company hires employees with a bachelor's degree and evaluates their performance by evaluating them every year.
In other words
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, people need to learn something new about the culture, food, and work
so
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, so
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 it is easy for them to get a job with a high salary.
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, the government needs talent
so
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, so
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 it has improved the roads, towers, and construction for the city.
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, my father motivated me to have an accounting degree to get a promotion
and
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 I was going to Dubai because of him. Another point to consider, there was a test for the student to join the
university
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the
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. The
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 test shows who is eligible to participate in the
university
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's subjects. It is
also
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 possible to say that more people need to gain knowledge to be more comfortable in life.
Moreover
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, the company supports the employees to get a bachelor's or master.
For instance
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, the Saudi Aramco company encourages its workers to have an education to give them grades.  In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that taking the majors is a story can not be forgotten by making a lot of fun with
collages
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college
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. I prefer to take the online courses to develop my skills.

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structure
Plan your essay. Write a short plan with the main idea, two points, and a short ending.
coherence
Use links to show how ideas fit together, like first, also, and because.
grammar
Keep to simple copies. Use small, clear sentences.
content
Stick to the question. Do not add many new ideas.
content
Give one or two clear examples that match the point you make.
content
There is effort to give reason why college is good.
structure
There is a clear end and a view on online study.
content
Some examples are used to back points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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