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Band 4.5

Some people think that vaccinating is dangerous and not useful. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays,
vaccines
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 are used to protect
people
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 from serious
diseases
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. Some
people
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 believe that
vaccination
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 can be harmful and not useful, but I disagree with
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 idea. In
this
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 essay, I will explain why
vaccines
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 are important and give examples.
First,
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vaccines
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 help prevent many
diseases
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 before they happen.
For example
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, newborn babies receive
vaccines
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 in the first hours or days of life to protect them from illnesses
such
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 as tuberculosis, jaundice, and hepatitis.
Vaccines
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 help the body fight infections and keep
people
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 healthy.
This
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 shows that
vaccines
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 are very useful and important for preventing sickness. It is true that
vaccines
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 can sometimes cause minor side effects. Adults or children may feel tired, have mild nausea, or
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have small
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 aches after
vaccination
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. I remember that in 2017, my classmate felt dizzy and had redness after getting a vaccine.
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, these problems usually do not
last
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 long and are not serious. The advantages of
vaccines
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 are much more important than these small problems. In conclusion, even though
vaccination
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 may cause some mild side effects, it is very important for preventing serious
diseases
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. Everyone should take
vaccines
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 after consulting a doctor to stay healthy and protect themselves from illnesses.
Vaccination
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 is a simple and effective way to keep
people
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 safe from many dangerous
diseases
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.

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content
State a clear view of your position and plan what you will say in a simple plan.
content
Add only true facts and simple examples. Do not give wrong facts such as jaundice is stopped by vaccines.
style
Use simple time order words like First, Next, Also, But, Finally to link ideas.
language
Check your sentences so they are easy to read and not too long.
stance
Your view is clear: vaccines are useful and not harmful.
organization
The essay has good shape: introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence
You use linking words to show order and contrast.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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