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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? how can this be solved?

In some countries, the amount of flora and fauna is decreasing. In my
opinion
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this
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 is happening because of
increasing
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the increasing
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 human population and
destruction of the
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the destruction of
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plants
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 and
animal's
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animals'
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 natural habitat.
This
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 problem can be solved by protecting the natural habitats and reducing
the
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apply
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human greed.
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 the growth of
human
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the human
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 population, the need for food and shelter is on
rise
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the rise
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.
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 is leading to
cutting
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the cutting
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 down of forests
which
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, which
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is
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are
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 the home of vegetation and wildlife.
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,a large number of
animals
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 are now moving to commercial areas in search of food and
home
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a home
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which
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, which
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 is a rising concern
of
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for
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 many residents.
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, the government authorities should invest more in making conservative parks for the endangered species of both
plants
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 and
animals
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. Another reason
of
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for
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 worry is
killing
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the killing
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 and poaching of
animals
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 for their furs.
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,
In
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in
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 India,
Siberian
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the Siberian
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 tiger was on the verge of extinction in
80s
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the 80s
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 because of the
greaat
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great
 demand for its skin. Now , the Indian government has taken strict measures to ban the poaching of
animals
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. Different species of
plants
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 cannot survive extreme pollution and are going extinct. In conclusion, the extinction of several
plants
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 and
animals
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 is caused by the destruction of habitats because of increasing population and
the
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apply
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people's greed. These issues can only be solved by making more conservation areas and by caring more about the
mothee
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natural
nature
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environment
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.

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development
Your main view is clear and you say why plants and animals fall. Add more calm detail to back each point.
coherence
Make the flow smoother with better links between ideas. Use words like first, next, also, but, so.
language
Fix big spelling and grammar. Use simple, easy words and check facts you give, like the tiger example.
strength
Clear view of causes and plan to help.
structure
Good shape with intro, body and conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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