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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates how the unemployed
arrenged
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arranged
 their
time
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 in
UK
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the UK
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last
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 year.
It is clear that
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women
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 tended to
spent
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spend
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 their
time
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 on
housewok
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housework
 both in the morning and the
afternoon
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(which is 49% and 21% respectively),
while
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men
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perfered
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preferred
 to do job hunting in the morning and watch TV in the
afternoon
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(which is 22% and 14% respectively).
Besides
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, the table
also
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 shows that 14% of unemployed
men
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 spent
time
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 on gardening in the morning;
however
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, on
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women's
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the women's
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 aspect, there
was
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were
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 only 2% of them
decided
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who decided
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 to garden
in
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at
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 the same
time
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.
Insterstingly
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Interestingly
,
women
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prefered
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preferred
 to do gardening in the
afternoon
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, with 13%. On the
contrarary
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contrary
, only 3% of
men
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 would do gardening in the
after noon
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afternoon
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.
According to
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 the table, it is
also
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noticebale
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noticeable
 that most
men
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 and
women
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 tended not to drink in the morning.
Nervertheless
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Nevertheless
, there
was
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were
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 still 2% of
men
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decided
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who decided
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 to drink in the morning, and 3% of them drank in the
afternoon
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. Another
intersting
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interesting
 thing is that whenever it was morning or
afternoon
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, there
was
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were
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 few
women
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who choose
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choose
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chose
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 to play
sport
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sports
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. There was only 1% of
unemplyed
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unemployed
women
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exerised
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exercised
 in the morning,
while
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 there
was
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were
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 no
woman
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women
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 doing
sport
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sports
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 in the
afternoon
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, women, afternoon, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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