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Many people join distance-learning programs and study at home, but some think that it cannot bring the same benefits as attending colleges or universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been
obesrved
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observed
 that many
students
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 have started to
enroll
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enrol
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themselves
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apply
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in programs that offer E-learning .
This
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 has reduced the percentage of
students
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 in
classrooms
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.
While
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 some people are in favour of these
programms
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programs
, some believe
this
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 is a negative development in
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the educational
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 department. From my perspective,
physical
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the physical
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 presence of
students
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 in the
classrooms
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 is necessary . There is no doubt that colleges and universities not only provide the necessary knowledge to
students
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, but
it
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they
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also
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teaches
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teach
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 them basic ethics and values.
For example
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, a daily practice of going
college
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to college
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 on
time
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 and attending lectures in their
classrooms
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teach
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teaches
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 them discipline .
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 during lectures with teachers and sharing ideas with fellow
mates
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students
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 boost confidence and
communicating
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communication
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 skills. The universities
also
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 provide a platform for extracurricular activities like sports .The participants not only learn
time
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mangement
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management
 skills but
also
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 help them to go through
with
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apply
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failures.
On the other hand
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, e-learning
help
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helps
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 those
students
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 who want to study
further
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 despite
of
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apply
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their busy schedules, family and jobs.
This
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 might be an excellent
oppotunity
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opportunity
 for those who can not travel abroad for their higher education
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thus
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reduce
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reducing
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 the travel cost and
time
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while
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 focusing on their family and job.
To conclude
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,
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Although
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although
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 distance learning
provide
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provides
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 many benefits
while
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 saving
time
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 and money
but
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, but
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 physical need
of
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for
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classrooms
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 can never be neglected.

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overall
Your view is clear but you need more focus. Start with a strong main idea and keep it.
structure
In each paragraph, show one idea and tell it with two small details. Use linking words to show how ideas connect.
content
Give specific facts or examples to support points about campus life and online study.
strength
You take a clear position on the topic.
strength
You mention both sides of the issue.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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